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Post #1039641

Author
Sir Ridley
Parent topic
TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released)
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Date created
26-Jan-2017, 9:58 AM

Hal 9000 said:

Episode VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

Luke Skywalker has vanished. In his absence, the sinister FIRST ORDER has risen from the ashes of the Empire, along with a secret weapon to secure their return to power.

Failing to convince the New Republic of this emerging threat, General Leia Organa mobilizes a covert RESISTANCE to gather allies from the farthest reaches of the galaxy.

Desperate for her brother’s help, Leia has sent her most trusted pilot on a daring mission to Jakku, where a clue has been discovered to Luke’s whereabouts…

I mostly like this, but…

“… along with a secret weapon to secure their return to power.
Failing to convince the New Republic of this emerging threat …”

Implying that Leia knows about SKB and is telling the New Republic? Hmm.

“General Leia Organa mobilizes a covert RESISTANCE to gather allies from the farthest reaches of the galaxy.”

Mobilizes a resistance to gather allies. I feel like these are variations of the same thing (get people together to oppose the First Order). Maybe something along the lines of “General Leia Organa gathers allies from the farthest reaches of the galaxy to form a covert RESISTANCE.”